User:PeterTruong04/Droughts in California/C nguyen143 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

PeterTroung04


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:PeterTruong04/Droughts_in_California?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Droughts in California

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

The information that is located in the lead now does reflect the new information that will be added to the article. The lead does a good work on keeping is clear and concise by not providing unnecessary examples and gives a general outline about what a drought is and the main causes of droughts in california specifically.

Content

The content that is added to the topic is in relevance to the entire topic as it is talking about how farmers are suffering through the intense droughts that occur in california, since the Central Valley area is made up of mostly farm land. The content is up to date because all of the articles that were used to retrieve the data was all from 2022, so it is pretty relevant to today's society.

Tone and Organization

There are some words sprinkled into the paragraph that can make the reader perceive a different way or more of a biased view than expected, but overall the information added to the topic is nicely worded and very focused on one point of view. There are no spelling errors but the sentences could be split into two to shorten the information that is trying to inform a person.

Sources

The sources are reliable as the websites come from valid authors. They are all relevant and up to date. Additionally, the links work when clicked on.