User:Petermu9s/Ambulatory care/Joseita Tesolin Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The draft for your article on ambulatory care is very well written and sourced so far. I think that the lead in to the article is very clear and concise, which is essential for a good Wikipedia article. One suggestion is, perhaps, that you could include the link between ambulatory care and  education somewhere in the introductory paragraphs.

In terms of the rest of the article, I think that the headings are clear and well organized. One small thing regarding formatting in the “Scope” section is that I think the bullet points could be differentiated to indicate the different parts and sub parts of information. For example using numbers or letter (1. 2. 3.) or (A. B. C.) for the different places and using the bullet points for the secondary information. Furthermore, considering our course is focused on education, I do think that the education section of this article could be more developed.

In terms of your media, I like the images that are currently on the page. I think that you could also perhaps include one that relates more the the education aspect of ambulatory care as well.

Regarding your writing tone, I think that you have done a great job of renaming neutral and not having any biases throughout the article. I would not know your position or personal opinions on the topic by reading this article.

Concerning your sources, I think that they are included thoroughly throughout the article and that they are well researched. Again, I do think that you could have a wider variety of information and sources for the section on ‘education’ as it is the main focus of this course.

Overall great work! I learned a lot from your article already and I look forward to reading the final product.

- Joseita T