User:Pg.pinapple/Red beryl/Tahliafarr Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Pg.pinapple


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Pg.pinapple/Red_beryl?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template\


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Red beryl - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
A history section was added which gives the reader important information towards the background of the gemstone. I think this section is explained well, you could add an image of either the person to discover this, or a location where it was. Also the person who discovered it was a mineralogist, so this may be an important bit of information that could be added before his name.

Adding the rarity section is a very smart idea. I think the sentences could be structured a bit different, as they don't flow the best. For example it could read as "According to the Utah Geological Survey, it is estimated that red beryl is found once for every 150,000 diamonds. One carat is known to sell upwards of $5000 in the United states".

I think you did a wonderful job of adding important information to this article (the original is quite short). I think by adding some more pictures, whether it be of the stone itself or items associated with it, could help increase the effectiveness of your article. If you also need more to write about in this article, it could be helpful to add a section on location. For example, even though this stone is rare (you did a great job at highlighting this!), where are most naturally found and then where are they common to be sold?

Great Job!!