User:PhilChartier/Isabella of Mar/Gdpanassol Peer Review

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PhilChartier


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 * User:PhilChartier/Isabella of Mar
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 * Isabella of Mar

Evaluate the drafted changes
First and foremost, Philip did a great job at expanding the original article into an informative article about Isabella of Mar. Not only that, but Philip delved into the background of Isabella, including detailed information about what was happening during the time she was alive, and even after she passed. His updated article has a good pace, more than enough information about her family, her political stances and her legacy.

Philip’s wikipedia article is divided into two main sections, one of them about the “Great Causa” and the other one about “Robert the Bruce and Marjorie Bruce,” Isabella’s daughter and husband. This latter section excels at giving a detailed historical background, always pushing the focus back to Marjorie, a medieval woman, and consequently, Isabella’s legacy. The only critique I have is the title of the section as the wording at first glance makes it as if Majorie and Robert are married. I am also assuming that the reason that there is a major historical background and Isabella’s legacy is because of lack of information about Isabella herself and more about what came after her. It is still a great section as it provides enough information about childbirth, the year Marjorie was born and what type of battles Bruce fought.

The lead part of the article, the one where it introduces Isabella, has more than enough information for someone who most likely did not have that many sources to her name. It focuses more on the dates of when major events occurred, but I do not believe that to be a weakness because, in terms of usage, most people go through Wikipedia to find relevant dates rather than to take information as a fact. Philip does a great job at this since all of his dates give a general year of when people died, which links back to the historical information part of his article.

By filling in Isabella’s article with his research of what the times were like during her life and post-death, Philip gives the reader a great amount of information to work with when it comes to how people lived their lives in the Medieval years. Going from death at childbirth to major royal conflicts, his article also mentions a good amount of people that can redirect the reader to other Wikipedia articles. With few sources on Isabella of Mar, I believe Philip managed to fill up her article with relevant information not only about her but about those around her.