User:Phwikiproj/Cryptococcosis/Srmmicro24 Peer Review

Lead

Lead has been updated, new statistics, information, data has been added. The original document didn't have much information so it looks a lot better! The sentences are direct and concise, giving only factual information with no opinions or "fluff". There are a couple statistics with no citations so I would maybe look into making sure that everything is cited that needs to be. I think I would rearrange the paragraph a little bit so the information flows a little bit more smoothly, adding in the first sentence into the paragraph so it doesn't stand alone.

Content

Content is up to date. I had to toggle between the original document and the groups updated one, but it is clear that lots of information has been added. I really like how information is focused on global statistics and then there is a separate section for the United States and Sub-Saharan Africa.

Tone and Balance

Tone is very neutral and factual. There are no bias statements. Good mix of global and domestic data showing representation.

Sources

Plethora of sources are used, all from reputable/credible sources. Many in text citations are good. I think there might need to be a few more citations added in the first paragraph with some of the statistics given.

Organization and Images

The organization is well thought out. I think some of the paragraphs could be slightly rearranged so that the information flows a little better and to keep similar information together. It might be beneficial to add in an image or graph to keep the article engaging.

Overall

Overall the article is very enhanced! I really appreciate all the additions and the effort shown. Definitely made the article more informative. Great job!

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