User:Physicalist/Hempel's Dilemma/Doopdole Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

physicalist


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Physicalist/Hempel%27s_Dilemma?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
There are many mentions of personal opinions or experiences; "we may define the physical as what is explained by our best physical theories", "for we have no idea of what this means."

I think that the group has a good understanding of the topics we have reviewed in class, they clearly state what the physicalism argument is about, and they have edited and added to the article that helps the readers who may be uneducated on the topic understand easier.

I find that even though they have not added a lot to the article, what they did add has made it more clear and as they add more to it i imagine it will improve further.

Make sure you are not using a personal biased or pronouns to try and stay away from picking sides.

Don't add comma after concept in first sentence.

Try to cut down the size of the text to only include super important stuff.