User:Pickwickwoop/Mohammad Zaman/GreenMoose37 Peer Review

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(provide username) Pickwickwoop
 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mohammad Zaman
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Evaluate the drafted changes
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I think you did a good job reformatting some of the sentences that discuss his life. Before your edits, the sentence structure was very repetitive and now it's not. I also think it was a good idea to just have a references section instead of a sources and references section which seems unwieldy. The table you made is also informative and lays out his work in a very clear way. Awesome job!

For improvements, I think more information on his works would be good. Does he have a distinct artistic style and was its similar to any other artists/were any of his works collaborative? How did being from Iran but converting to catholicism effect his art? Where was his art published? Did he actually die at 20 (his current lifetime in the article is 1680 to 1700?), if so why? Perhaps adding a paragraph or two to the works section or adding an artistic style section would be good. Also, I'm a little confused about the last work in the table (the copper plate printers at work) since it was 84 years after his death so if you could elaborate on that. Additionally, I love the table, but the chronology of it is a little hard to follow, so if you add a works written section, writing it chronologically might help readability.

I think we have sorta similar articles (I also have an artist whose page was pretty short before edits) and I love your table idea!