User:Piesu123/Lake Nasser/MightyFiveEleven Peer Review

General info
User:Piesu123
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Piesu123/Lake Nasser
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Lake Nasser

Lead Section
The lead section of the draft is unaltered from that of the existing article and the editor has noted as such. In its current form the lead offers a brief introduction to the topic and some historical background related to the "Current Issues" section, but does not offer information regarding tourism in the area; the editor is working to expand/reorganize these sections in their draft and the final version of the lead should touch upon each of these areas once they are complete.

Clarity of Structure
The order of sections presented in the draft (Lead/Description/History/Economy/Future concerns) makes logical sense and the consolidation/reworking of the "Current Issues" section of the main article into the "Future concerns" section at the end of the article is a smart move.

Coverage Balance
The "Description" section of the draft is unaltered from that of the existing article while the "History" section is currently under expansion; the "Controversies" subsection looks nearly complete and offers a good overview of opposition to the construction of the Aswan High Dam and resultant creation of Lake Nasser, which the main "History" section will hopefully counterbalance in the final draft. The "Economy" and "Future concerns" sections of the article may need some further expansion, but already provide more information than the main Lake Nasser article, and the editor has already noted that work is underway on these.

Content Neutrality
The editor has done a good job of maintaining an overall neutral point of view on the subject, and the content of the article does not take any firm ideological stance. The current wording of the "Future concerns" section, however, feels somewhat sensationalized and could be revised to convey the same information in a somewhat less alarmist tone.

Conclusion
You have a solid article taking shape here and a good roadmap of where it can be expanded and/or improved! Keep an eye on the tone/phrasing of new sections as you add them and keep expanding your list of sources and you should be all set. Good work!

MightyFiveEleven (talk) 06:43, 9 March 2024 (UTC)