User:Pikelake6/Andragogy/Cinnamoncardamom Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Pikelake6


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Andragogy Draft
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Andragogy Wikipedia Page
 * Andragogy Wikipedia Page

Evaluate the drafted changes
Everything in the article sections were relevant. Aside from a couple grammatical errors, there were no distractions. The article is written neutrally. However, viewpoints of European and American scholars were overrepresented. This may be due to the sources available on this topic. Furthermore, I am curious if there are any sources addressing discourse about andragogy outside of Europe and the United States. I don’t see links to the citations under the “References” section. One way to use the Wikipedia citation tool is to:


 * Drag the “Reload via U of M Libs” link to your bookmark bar in your browser. When you search for your source and then click on this link on your bookmark bar, it will reload and give you access to the article through the UMN account.
 * Locate the DOI number and enter it into the “Cite” tool and click “Generate.” This should make the links for your sources to show up.

Furthermore, Wikipedia uses footnote-style citations, so I don’t think APA citations are necessary (in addition to the footnotes). The sources chosen are appropriate and relevant; journal articles dated from the late 20th century to 2022. At the end of the “Definitions” section, a source you can use for the last claim may be one of the first two sources on the references list.

Idea for the Comparison Chart:


 * Put “andragogy,” “pedagogy,” and “heutagogy” on three rows on the left side of the chart
 * Put columns for “learner role” and “educator role” and work in the definitions for each in the blank cells

Editing Suggestions:


 * Use a footnote-style citation for the Merriam-Webster definition of andragogy in the “Definitions” and “History” sections instead of linking it to the dictionary page.
 * For the name “Knowles”, use Knowles’ or Knowles’s to show possession.
 * Under the “History” section, it says “…consulting with Merriam-Webster…” Changing the phrase to “consulting with the Merriam-Webster dictionary” can improve clarity.
 * Use the lowercase for “Heutagogy” to have consistency with the lowercase use of “andragogy” and “pedagogy”
 * Instead of APA citation, rely on Wikipedia’s citation tool to generate footnotes.
 * There is a mistake on reference #4. There is a sentence instead of a source.