User:PimpDaddyPeaches/Pausanias (general)/FishMan312 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:PimpDaddyPeaches


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:PimpDaddyPeaches/Pausanias (general)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Pausanias the Regent

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The contributions you made to the article are neutral and do not persuade the reader.

The references you used of "Xenophon, Constitution of the Lacedaimonians, chapter 4, section 6". www.perseus.tufts.edu. Retrieved 2021-05-20. and Herodotus. The Histories 9.10. seem to be good sources.

I think the content you added about the early life of Pausanis contributed to the childhood of Pausanias in how it described the life of what normal spartan boys would experience and how royalty did not make him exempt of participation of training.

Early Life
Pausanias like all Spartan citizens (Spartiate), would have gone through the intense training from his early childhood at the age of seven and be a regular soldier until the age of thirty. Pausanias was from the royal house Agiads, and even with royal blood and belonging to the one of the royal families that did not exempt him from going through the same training as every other citizen. As every male Spartan citizen earned their citizenship by dedicating their lives to their Polis and its laws.

War Service

Herodotus concluded that "Pausanias the son of Cleombrotus and grandson of Anaxandridas won the most glorious victory of any known to us". This sentence needs a citation. A suggestion that might be useful is to mention who Herodatus was and their relationship with Pausanias.

This sentence is full of useful information that contributes to the content under "War service", but it is missing a citation. It might be useful to have a follow up sentence about the importance of Pausanias's actions in the military and what effects they had.

"After the victories at Plataea and the Battle of Mycale, the Spartans lost interest in liberating the Greek cities of Asia Minor until it became clear that Athens would dominate the League in Sparta's absence. Sparta then sent Pausanias back to command the Greek military."