User:Pisawagner/Teratology/Habaker930 Peer Review

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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://w.wiki/9Bnp :Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):https://w.wiki/9Bnr

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The lead has not been edited, but there was an initial lead present that adequately described what the article's topic, Teratology, is. It not only explains what Teratology is, but it explains topics and subgroups of Teratology like Teratogens and what they are and affects that might come from them during embryogenesis. The lead is not too lengthy and gives the information that the audience needs to understand the umbrella term of Teratology. In regards to the added information that was given in the sandbox, there was some information that was helpful and then there was information that was slightly repetitive in the article. The first edit that was placed was the the newly added information of how Vitamin A, when taken out of context, is going to lead to teratogenesis. This information, not only was related to the topic, but was correct and expanded on other teratogens that were not detailed in the original article. I think, because the article does not provide adequate information on teratogens and what they can consist of, you could entail a bit more about specific teratogens and how they lead to the characteristics that are discussed under the "Research into teratogenesis" heading. The second edit that was posted discussing the effects of aromatic hydrocarbon was very insightful. I think that describing how you can be exposed to aromatic hydrocarbon would be a little more helpful, especially if someone does not know what aromatic hydrocarbon is, nor where it can be encountered. I think that you could also expound more about what the negative effects of this hydrocarbon to the placenta, due to it not being listed in the article. The edit that was made about the effects of drinking alcohol during pregnancy, I believe was a bit repetitive. The edit stated what the article was saying as well: that alcohol is going to cause defects during embryogenesis that will affect the embryo for life. I think that this edit could be taken out and could be focused elsewhere. Lastly, the edit about chemical and environmental hazard exposure was repetitive as well. Under the heading, "Research into teratogenesis," there was already information about possible exposure to these hazards, which stated that there was visceral and skeletal abnormalities that were witnessed. I think that this edit could possibly elaborate more and tackle maybe what types of chemical and environmental hazards could cause these effects in humans. You could maybe give 1-2 examples apiece. The sources used for the edits regarding Vitamin A and aromatic hydrogen exposure is a little outdated, as it is from 1999. I believe that the information in the article is sufficient for the information that was used in your sandbox. For the edit regarding the alcohol consumption, the reference is outdated as well, but has useful information that could be included. You could use the effects and physical consequences that are to occur for drinking alcohol during pregnancy. Elaborate more on this topic in the source you provided. Lastly, the source connected to the environmental and chemical hazards has a vast amount of choices that you could use to incorporate more about the chemical and environmental hazards that effect embryogenesis. The article itself, though outdated as well, is a great one. Most of the words that need picture attachments to them have them, so I believe that no pictures need to be added. Overall, I think that there was some good edits made. There are some specific sections, as mentioned earlier that need to be elaborated on more, but all-in-all, great job.