User:Pixels3587/Separation anxiety in dogs/Bio Neuro Student Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Pixels3587


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Pixels3587/Separation_anxiety_in_dogs?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Separation anxiety in dogs

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

In the beginning of the diagnosis section there is some repetition of the fact that dogs develop separation anxiety from past traumatic experience. The repetition is redundant therefore it may be beneficial to edit this slightly. The frequent use of the word behaviour in the first section is slightly distracting, you may want to use some different wording throughout so it is not as repetitive.

In the first paragraph of the treatment section there is no citation. It may be beneficial here to cite where the term "owner addicts" came from.

Under the section for behaviour related problems all information seems to be coming form the same source. It could help your article if you compiled several sources that support this information. Also, in this section it would benefit your article to add a few citation particularly the abuse and boredom sections.

The first source on your list does not seen to be a peer reviewed journal article. Consider reviewing the source to make sure it is valid. Also, your second source is not cited anywhere in the paper. Perhaps consider removing this source if you did not use any information from it.

Your article is very well organized and seems to be well researched. It was very interesting to read! Overall, double checking some sources and some improvement in your wording could improve your contribution.