User:Pjaml/Biogeochemistry/Aderush Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Pjaml


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Pjaml/Biogeochemistry?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The first few sentences are not very concise and should be strong as an introduction to the topic. Perhaps the author could expand a bit more on the history because it feels like the author is trying to fit all the history in a few sentences. I liked how the three different spheres were separated out. That made the point the author wanted to express clear and easier to understand. The human activities sentence after the three spheres should be in a separate paragraph. It appears the first sentence of the article body can also be a part of the history as well.

Overall, I think it is a start and the author needs to organize the structure a little bit more and add some more content. I think it is a great start and a lot of information to navigate so keep up the good work. Another suggestion would be to find more sources and more recent sources. Perhaps the author could add a section talking about the impacts of the discoveries related to biogeochemistry has impacted us today.