User:Pjuan8/Visual communication/Samtaliuw Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

SamtaliUW


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Pjuan8/Visual communication


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Visual communication

Evaluate the drafted changes
First of all, I think you added a lot of really good information. My biggest issue is that you deleted a large portion of the article that seems to have a significant relevance. For example, you got rid of "Study", "Visual communication", and "Visual elements." These section have valuable information on them and I think it would be wrong to delete them. I would also recommend changing the tone of some of your sentences. For example, you wrote, "It is apparent that there has been a shift towards more visual images, with the rise of YouTube, Instagram, and Snapchat," it might seem apparent to you, but for this context you should write from a neutral viewpoint. I would change the sentence to something like, "Recently, there has been a shift toward the use of more visual imagery, with the rise of platforms like YouTube, Instagram, and Snapchat." The new information you plan on adding is good. I like that you used lots of citations. One thing you I would suggest, would be to move your citations to the ends of sentences. For example, you have one right in the middle of your first sentence. You might also think about rearranging your layout. You could add more pictures or do something to make it a better read. The article just looks pretty boring, aesthetically, there is more to be added.