User:Plantbella/Declaration of Sexual Rights/Nyxtingale Peer Review

General info
Plantbella
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Plantbella/Declaration of Sexual Rights
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Declaration of Sexual Rights

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The introductory sentence clearly describes this article's topic.

Content

The Historical Context and Revisions sections are well-written and relevant to the topic. Keeping in mind that this is a work-in-progress, more content could be added for the Reception section.

Tone and Balance

The tone overall is pretty good. The content added feels unbiased and factual, tone-wise.

Sources and References

The sentence "It was revised and expanded in 2015." seems to need a source to back it up, as the reference linked is a source from 2008. Moreover, looking at the original article, the source that it links from the WAS says the Declaration was revised in 2014, not 2015. Reference #2 is also missing a URL, if that is something which is available. You did a good job at linking other Wikipedia articles into your paragraphs so that readers are able to get the full context.

Organization

The new content is appropriately divided into different sections, which are also well-ordered.

Images and Media

The images added are currently not captioned, and also do not seem to be very relevant to the article's topic.

Overall Impressions

I really like the way that you have organized your content - it makes everything much clearer and flow better. I would focus on checking the sources used for your content, as well as adding more information in order to build up the article. Also, the images should either be changed to be more relevant to the topic at hand, and/or captioned to state the relevance.