User:Plantnoob/Penelope Mountjoy/GalaticPanda Peer Review

General info
Plantnoob
 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Penelope Mountjoy - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 *  They are the same article, due to editing taking place in the article rather then the sandbox. 
 * Penelope Mountjoy - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead- It sounds like she is a very private person, but reference picture might be helpful to readers who are more visual learners, so that they know what she looks like. I am not sure if you will be able to find any, or if you have looked yet, but it maybe a helpful addition.

Content- As you might notice I accidently made my initial edits directly on the page itself, the main thigs I changed were what I felt made the flow better and reworded and added to a few section. You should be able to see the edits that I made under the history tab, and you should also be able to revert back to your original work if my edits are not on base with what you were thinking.

Tone and Balance- This area of the article is well done, you might try and write more in depth about the books she has written to add more length to your article.

Sources and References- Well done on finding a wide range of sources for such a private person. One suggestion I would have is to try and find more images of her, and maybe some pictures of her books or other area mentioned in your article.

Organization- One suggestion I have related to this is to add a section about personal life if you can find any information on it, maybe a section on childhood, and how she chose Archeology as a career path. This could also help add some depth and length to your article.

Images and Media- Add more if you can find them, since there seems to be limited information on her add some pictures of her or her work can help to make the article feel fuller even if it is still shorter!

Overall- For the limited information that seems to be present on this individual, very nice job writing about her!