User:Plloren/Bimodal bilingualism/Cbaer9 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Bimodal Bilingualism Group


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Plloren/Bimodal bilingualism
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bimodal bilingualism
 * Bimodal bilingualism

Evaluate the drafted changes
First of all, there is a lot of great detailed information on changes to be made. I want to point out the importance of recognizing the mistaken hyperlink on the lead section otherwise people like me would have never bothered to take a look at it. I support the idea of making this section to be more positive towards Deaf people as it is mentioned mostly in the edited suggestions and it is also important to keep in mind to not get too biased about it. Even though I personally agree with the necessity of not making Deaf people connote with negative terminologies. There are different views surrounding bilingualism where academic articles have been published to claim that bilingualism does not benefit Deaf people, which those articles has a valuable considerations in it. There are many informations to be processed with the suggested edits and I would recommend the group to narrow down to few most important points you all want to get across. So that way it will become more meaningful rather than spreading out too thin on each section.