User:Plubell/Pharmacological torture/Mmswens Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Plubell/ Pharmacological torture


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Plubell/Pharmacological_torture?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Pharmacological torture

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

So, from what I can tell it doesn't appear as if this person has started their draft in the sandbox. With that being said, here are some suggestions I would make to them for when they start. One, It doesn't look like he article its self has much content to it already so I would start your first paragraph introducing the topic just as if you started this whole article. That way the reader has some idea of what's going on and others can build off that start point. Two, make sure you clearly reference outside sources you use and cite them in the article appropriately. You don't want your portion to be unreliable because of copyright issues. Lastly, make sure you include clear grammar so the reader can understand what it is you are saying. Clear grammar can really make the difference between a good article and a bad one so just keep that in mind as well. Also, if you did write something and I just looked in the wrong spot I apologize and you can still take what I said and make sure everything applies. Good luck!