User:Poisonpearl/Clonal anergy/Echall.su Peer Review

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Poisonpearl
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Poisonpearl/Clonal anergy
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Clonal anergy

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From what I read on the paper, I feel like you are doing a good job. What you have now is a good foundation for the rest of the paper. The lead consists of all relevant information for the rest of the paper. I would go back and edit some of the wording at times, I think it could be more concise. for instance the first sentence I would maybe word it "In immunology, anergy..." I'm really excited to see where this paper goes, the topic is so interesting. Well done this far, keep going in the direction you are now, can't wait to read more!