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History of Korean Americans in Greater Los Angeles

I am interested in the history Korean Americans in America. As a Korean American, I want there to be access to information as to how Korean Americans lived in America.

Evaluate the article
There a lot of topics covered in this article and many of the information already posted in this article are written out. However, there are few points to be made that can help improve the article.


 * 1) The lead does not fully summarize the contents of the article and though it is concise, there could be more to be said that would be able to properly summarize the main sections of this article. The lead brings a fact that is already stated in a later section. Though it is not necessarily bad to bring up the population of Koreans in the beginning, for it to be the only thing listed on the lead weakens the article overall.
 * 2) Some of the contents are out of date such as the Geography and the Demographic sections. These sections can be easily updated since it is more about population.
 * 3) It would be better to put the contents of the 1992 LA riots as its own section. It was an important moment in history especially for the Korean American community in LA as it had its causes and effects, which can be further explained with its history and the effects by the riots if it had its own section. Adding on, a picture can be added to enhance the reading to depict that moment of history.