User:Pomagranny/The More The Better/Af4718 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Pomagranny


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Pomagranny/The_More_The_Better?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Nam_June_Paik

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.) The information on the artist is well-written. The Lead is a concise introduction to the artist's work. I would just say add more to "The more, the better" and her legacy and influence. Explain the visual experience of "The more, the better" and how the work had inspired video installation artists and the development of media art. The article is a neutral account on the artist; I am neither in support or against her. Don't forget to add the references in the paragraphs. I noticed that one of your sources is a website-formatted (gallery(?)) review on the artist. I am not sure if that can be included in the bibliography. However, most of the sources appear to be current.