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Donnie Darko Final Draft
// underlined + italicized means it is already in the article,

// struck through means i plan to remove it

// bold means it is new content

Plot
Move, "Frank asks Donnie, who in turn asks his science teacher, Dr. Kenneth Monnitoff, if he believes in time travel. Monnitoff gives Donnie The Philosophy of Time Travel, a book written by Roberta Sparrow, a former science teacher at the school who is now a seemingly senile old woman living outside of town." down to after, "Kitty begins teaching "attitude lessons" taken from local motivational speaker Jim Cunningham, but Donnie rebels against these, leading to friction between Kitty and Rose." After "'' Donnie also starts seeing Gretchen Ross, who has recently moved into town with her mother under a new identity to escape her violent stepfather." '' add:

Dr. Thurman hypnotizes Donnie at his next therapy session, but it ends with him discussing his sexual fantasies involving Christina Applegate while he unzips his pants, causing Thurman to end the session prematurely.

'''Later, Donnie goes to a clearing and shoots bottles while his friends discuss the sexual components of Smurfs, including Vanity Smurf's alleged homosexuality, the dynamics of a Smurf orgy, and the characteristics of Smurfette. Donnie interrupts them angrily, correcting their misinformation about Smurfette's origin and affirming the Smurf people's asexuality and lack of genitals.''' Move '' "Frank begins to influence Donnie's actions through his sleepwalking episodes, including causing him to flood his high school by breaking a water main."  up to after: "She believes he is detached from reality and that his visions of Frank are "daylight hallucinations", symptomatic of paranoid schizophrenia."'' "Ricky and Seth flee when an oncoming car swerves to avoid her  Sparrow and runs over Gretchen, killing her." After, ''Frank asks Donnie, who in turn asks his science teacher, Dr. Kenneth Monnitoff, if he believes in time travel. Monnitoff gives Donnie The Philosophy of Time Travel, a book written by Roberta Sparrow, a former science teacher at the school who is now a seemingly senile old woman living outside of town."'' add:

'''Donnie, while sitting and watching football, notices bubbly columns emerging from the chests of those around him that show Donnie where the person will move. A bubble appears on his chest and he follows it to his parents' closet where he finds and takes a gun.'''

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Website
The official Donnie Darko website, donniedarko.com, which can still be found at http://archive.hi-res.net/donniedarko/ is an interactive experience and marketing tool for the film made by Hi-ReS!, a digital marketing firm. The website is riddled with puzzles and secrets and contains never-before-seen information about the universe of the film, including information about the fate of many of the characters after the film ends. James Beck has commented on the website's validity as a narrative in and of itself due to the website's introduction of new content while reinforcing themes from the movie like fluidity of time, exemplified by the website's lack of concern for the chronology of the movie. Beck further argues that the Donnie Darko website differs from most other promotional websites in that it treats the user not as an outside viewer, but rather as someone within the universe of the film, creating an experience rather than an advertisement.

Intro
The official Donnie Darko website, which has been archived by its creator Hi-ReS!, opens with a time counter that continues to count up since the day of the movies release. After proceeding, an ominous voice sounds, warning the user to "pay close attention" as a document appears on screen detailing Donnie's 1986 stay in juvenile detention for arson as well as the details of his escape attempt, both of which occurring while Donnie is sleepwalking. The user is asked to hit "y" or "n" in response to a series of questions, testifying against Donnie in the case. At this point, one is taken to the main menu which allows one to navigate through the three main levels of the site. In the background, a still image of Donnie on the roof of a car as he watches the wormhole form over his house. While level 1 does not require a password, levels 2 and 3 do, being "breathe" and "rose" respectively.

Level 1
Level 1 opens with a diagram of a man walking and a line protruding from his chest. Eventually this line creates a target which, when clicked, opens a pop-up to an article in the Middlesex Times Dispatch. This article is the obituary of Roberta Sparrow who died December 25, 1988, just two months after the events of the film. Sparrow published the Philosophy of Time Travel, in 1944 after leaving the church to pursue science. On any of these newspaper pop-ups, clicking any other link will bring you to an error page with a hyperlink to contact the webmaster. When the link is clicked, an email draft is made to the Hi-ReS! support team and an ASCII depiction of Frank appears alongside the message, "why are you wearing that stupid man-suit?" Once closed, a new arrow appears, leading to another target and pop-up, this time to a news report detailing the death of Dr. Kenneth Monnitoff, the teacher that gave Donnie The Philosophy of Time Travel, in a hit-and-run accident with an unknown suspect driving a black sedan. The article also details Monnitoff's career with NASA and the CIA before beginning his work as a teacher just before the events of the movie transpire. The article also reveals that Monnitoff married Karen Pomeroy, another Donnie's english teacher. A third arrow appears after this article is closed that prompts the user to type "Sparrow" and hit enter. This causes a letter to appear written by Karen Pomeroy Monitoff to Elizabeth Hartford at Library of Congress. The letter indicates that, in event of his death, Kenneth Monnitoff told Karen to send The Philosophy of Time Travel to Elizabeth, so that an ambiguous "they" can never find it. An image of Frank appears who tells the user to remember the word "smurf" followed by clips from the movie of Donnie and his father driving and narrowly avoiding Roberta Sparrow as she stands in the road. Frank soon reappears and asks the user if they remember the word. When "smurf" is typed into the text box, a series of smurfs appear, followed by the letter Donnie wrote to Roberta Sparrow. The word "breathe" is written in red and, when clicked, is revealed to be the password for level 2.

Level 2
Level 2 begins with a prompt for the password, "breathe." Once entered correctly, the user is greeted with a small image of a golf course. After clicking on a series of red targets, a news article appears from October 12, 1988 detailing the death of motivational speaker Jim Cunningham. Cunningham died from a self-inflicted gunshot wound but police, when searching for a suicide note, found his house emptied of all furniture and other belongings. On this page there are multiple links to cunning-visions.com which, when followed, lead to the Cunningham's web page, now operated by Linda Connie, the current president. On the top of the page there is a message honoring victims of the September 11th tragedy alongside a link to redcross.org. All other links serve as places go provide feedback to Hi-ReS!. After clicking on the next red target, then the two golfers, the user is prompted with certain scenarios and prompted to mark on a chalkboard where they land on a spectrum ranging from fear to love. The user is then prompted to type the name of the person who found the wallet, _. After following another series of red targets, a news article appears outlining Linda Connie's path to become president of Cunning Visions. A new sequence starts, depicting several small moments from the film in which Donnie burns down Cunningham's home.

Level 3
Level 3 begins, again, with a prompt for the password, giving the hint that it is a street and the name of a flower, "rose." A news article appears that details the story of a plane engine crashing into a house, causing Donnie's death. The article references a confusing lack of structural damage to the house, indicating a low-flying place, as well as no records of a plane crashing anywhere nearby. Another article linked at the bottom, and written three years later, suggests even more mystery around the incident, referring to the engine as "Engine X" and referencing rumors that President Bush visited the warehouse in which it is being kept. Next, a classified tape plays between the FAA and an agent from Heathrow Airport dated 1991. The man from Heathrow claims that they have found a match for the mysterious Engine X. The plane in question has been fully operational for six years and successfully flew between San Francisco and Denver on the day the engine fell on Donnie's house in Virginia. The man claims that not only are the serial numbers identical but the unique hand-painted spiral on the engine appears on both, accurate to fractions of an inch. When the man from Heathrow asks how to proceed with this matter, he is met with silence until the call disconnects. The words "time is up, donnie." appear on the screen with no way of leaving besides closing the page.

Book
In 2003, Richard Kelly released The Donnie Darko Book. The book begins with a foreword written by Jake Gyllenhaal in which he comments on the confusing nature of the film. Gyllenhaal claims he still does not really understand the movie, but that in a deeper sense it was never meant to be understood. He lauds philosophical discussion of the film and cites it as one of the his key takeaways from the film. Following this foreword appears an interview with the director, Kelly, titled "Asking Cosmic Questions," in which Kelly discusses the process of making and marketing the film, as well as questions about his personal life. The book then contains the full shooting script for the film followed by renderings of several pages from The Philosophy of Time Travel taken from the Hi-ReS! website. The next few pages are dedicated to photographs and concept sketches from the movie including early sketches of Frank's mask and slides from Jim Cunningham's school presentation. The final few pages are dedicated to the "THEY MADE ME DO IT" art exhibition in London that ran for 28 days in which several UK graffiti artists were given 6 hours, 42 minutes, and 12 seconds to complete a work inspired by the film.

Critical Reception
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Other critics, like Sam Adams called the movie a big mess, citing incoherent plot, sloppy writing, and an uneven tone. Adams also took issue with the seemingly irrelevant but oft-referenced setting in suburban American in the 1980's, claiming it serves as another example of the movies struggle to find identity. Another review from the San Antonio Current lauds the build-up, citing vast build of mysteries with compelling characters, but claims the movies ending leaves much to be desired, calling it cheap and anti-climactic.

General Observation
The article on The Handmaid's Tale includes an overwhelmingly long lead.

Concrete Point of Evaluation
There are several sentences within the lead which, despite containing valuable information, do not deserve a position in the lead. While there are several examples, the earliest appears at the bottom of the first paragraph: "Her name derives from the possessive form "of Fred"; handmaids are forbidden to use their birth names and must use names derivative of those of the male, or master, whom they serve." While this information is useful, it does not deserve a place in the lead section as it does not describe any aspect of the article that follows. This information also exists in the Characters sub-section and, therefore, does not need to be included again in the lead.

Actionable Item
Remove any information in the lead that describes parts of the novel. The lead should, rather, describe what is to follow in the article.

Evaluation of Fun Home
Fun Home's Wikipedia page does an excellent job remaining concise while still providing valuable information. Its subsections are each relevant and contain what seems to be the bulk of the valuable information. The one area where it seems to falter most is in the lead, where it provides far more information and context than it likely needs to. I also think that the article may benefit from the inclusion of more images, although I think this point is arguable, due to the visual nature of the text itself. The article also provides extensive information about efforts to get the book banned, although much of this information is old and the section should likely be updated to include more recent attempts and efforts. Specifically, the Plot and thematic summary section does a good job analyzing plot points, themes, and references, each in their own subsection.

Lead
The lead includes good information, but is on the longer side and reads very repetitively.

Background
There is almost no information on this subject in the article. There is no section dedicated to this information either.

Summary
The Plot Summary is decent in most regards, but has instances of analysis that should have their inclusion reconsidered. Further, the excessive information about setting and characters, which is exemplified by an unattractive article outline, could likely be condensed or reformatted in a way to better serve the interests of the reader.

Genre
Surprisingly, this section is rather thorough and includes some background information about the novel's genesis. This section could likely be trimmed a bit, with some of the excess being moved to the background section.

Analysis
This section is almost entirely skipped, with much of the analysis being incorrectly put into the other sections, particularly the summary section.

Publication
There is little information about the book's publication, besides some basic information found in the info-box on the right.

Reception
There is a decent amount of information about the reception to this book, particularly the critical and academic reception.

Awards
This novel has, of course, won a great deal of awards and I think it is deserving of this unique section. While awards are discussed in both "Reception" and "Lead," there could certainly be a distinct section for this information as well.

Evaluating content
Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?: The information is relevant.

Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added? Identify content gaps.: The subsection of the article could use more historical information.

What else could be improved?: The structure of the article could also be improved.

Evaluating tone
Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?: The article discusses purely the controversial aspects of the symbol, which, while supporting one viewpoint, only does so using facts and remains as impartial as possible given the situation. It could, however, contain more information about how the symbol has been defended historically.

Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?: Again, it seems as though it might be valuable to include more historical information as well as records of how the symbol has been defended.

Evaluating sources
Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?: Yes

Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?: Yes, the sourcing seems good.

Checking the talk page
Now take a look at how others are talking about this article on the talk page.: This specific section has received little attention

What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?: Conversation is minimal

How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?: it is not part of any current WikiProjects, but did receive a GA rating.

How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?: The article outlines the specific controversies surrounding the Cleveland Indian's logo, Chief Wahoo, and briefly mentions the origin of the symbol and why many consider it a racist symbol.