User:Porkhash808/Perdicella helena/Airahlonley Peer Review

General info
Porkhash808
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Porkhash808/Perdicella helena
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Perdicella helena

Evaluate the drafted changes
Please answer the following questions in detail addressed to the classmate whose article you are reviewing. Remember this is constructive feedback, so be polite and clear in your suggestions for improving their article. We are all working together to improve the Wikipedia pages for species native to Hawaii and for the World to meet.

Use a different font style (bold or italic) for your answers so it is easy for the author to see your comments!

'''I think that the article does well with the formatting. I am impressed by the sectioning as well as the information written.''' '''I see that your article also talks about the genus of your species, which is okay, but remember to mainly focus on your species only. The subtitles for the different sections are appropriate and matched what was written under it, however I think that you used the incorrect text size for your paragraph. Another thing that I think you could possibly fix is your grammar, but I find that the sentences were written quite well. Additionally, you should link your scientific words to another wikipedia page so that people will understand what you were talking about. One more thing is that you should italicize the scientific name for your species.''' '''Each sentence is linked to at least one source, but there should be more than 3 sources. If you can't find anymore then that's okay because I completely understand! Good job with your reference list, it's very proper. The quality of your sources are good too.''' '''As I stated above, you can fix the sizing of your font because it is not correct. Some of your sentences have grammar errors, but once you fix them, they will be good to go. You should also link some words that you think your viewers may not understand to another wikipedia page so they will be able to understand what you are writing about and remember to italicize your species scientific name. You should also try to find more sources. Unfortunately, I do not think that your draft is ready for prime-time and the world to see on Wikipedia.''' The most important thing that the author could do to improve the article is also what I have already stated above. I didn't find anything, but good job!
 * 1) First, what does the article do well? (Think about content, structure, complementing the existing article, writing, etc.)
 * 2) * Is there anything from your review that impressed you?
 * 1) Check the main points of the article:
 * 2) * Does the article only discuss the species the article is about? (and not the genus or family)
 * 3) * Are the subtitles for the different sections appropriate?
 * 4) * Is the information under each section appropriate or should anything be moved?
 * 5) * Is the writing style and language of the article appropriate? (concise and objective information for a worldwide audience)
 * 1) Check the sources:
 * 2) * Is each statement or sentence in the text linked to at least one source in the reference list with a little number?
 * 3) * Is there a reference list at the bottom?
 * 4) * Is each of those sources linked with a little number?
 * 5) * What is the quality of the sources?
 * 1) Give some suggestions on how to improve the article (think of anything that could be explained in more details or with more clarity or any issues addressed in the questions above):
 * 2) * What changes do you suggest and how would they improve the article?
 * 3) * Is the article ready for prime-time and the world to see on Wikipedia? If not, how could the author improve the article to be ready?
 * 1) What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?
 * 1) Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article?

Peer Review Comments

''Hello! Thank you for your comments on my writings. Fixing my font will be the first thing I work on. I was trying to make my words bigger, but instead I believe I did it wrong. Also, I will work on including more sources in my article.''

- Hector Manayan