User:Positive not popular pysch/Flow (psychology)/Jules2992 Peer Review

''This is a very good start! You did a really good job keeping a neutral tone. I would recommend adding a heading to break up your sections.''

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 * 1) Expansion Note: The statement suggesting expansion in the section is appropriate as it indicates an opportunity to provide more in-depth information and analysis on the topic. However, since the text you provided seems to be a summary or excerpt, it may not provide sufficient context to fully evaluate the extent of expansion required.
 * 2) Universal Definitions and Measurements: The text mentions that there are unresolved issues concerning the universal definitions and measurements associated with the concept of flow. It would be helpful to elaborate on these issues and provide specific examples or sources that highlight the challenges faced by researchers in defining and measuring flow consistently.
 * 3) Norsworthy et al.: It is mentioned that Norsworthy et al. conducted a systematic review of flow state studies from 2012 to 2019. To strengthen this point, it would be beneficial to summarize or provide key findings or conclusions from Norsworthy et al.'s study to demonstrate the relevance and significance of their work.
 * 4) Csikszentmihályi's Criticisms of Flow: The quotes from Csikszentmihályi regarding the potential negative effects of flow and its implications for the self provide valuable insights. However, it would be helpful to elaborate on these criticisms and provide additional context or examples to enhance readers' understanding.
 * 5) Keller and Landhäußer: The mention of Keller and Landhäußer advocating for a flow intensity model is a good point to include. To enhance this section, consider providing more details on their model and how it addresses the challenges faced by other flow models in predicting the intensity of flow experiences.
 * 6) Cowley et al.: The critique that self-reported flow experiences may not fully capture the in-the-moment aspect of flow is an interesting point. To expand on this criticism, it would be beneficial to explain why the self-reported experience may be unreliable and provide supporting evidence or examples.
 * 7) Cameron et al.: The mention that there is limited information on group flow is relevant. To strengthen this point, it would be helpful to explain the significance of group flow and how the lack of research in this area may hinder managerial and theoretical contributions. Additionally, providing suggestions or recommendations for further research would be valuable.
 * 8) Braxton Soderman's Monograph: The reference to Braxton Soderman's work on video games and flow, specifically the mention of flow as an individualist counterpoint to socialism, is an intriguing perspective. To enhance this section, consider providing a brief summary of Soderman's arguments and how they relate to the broader discussion on flow and its implications.

Overall, the content you've provided offers a good starting point for discussing criticisms related to flow experiences. Expanding on each point with more in-depth analysis, specific examples, and supporting evidence will help provide a comprehensive and well-rounded review of the criticisms.

Criticism
'''Research on flow experiences is well established, however there are still unresolved, critical issues with the universal definitions and measurements associated with the concept. In recent years, the language, definitions, measurement approaches, and models of flow state in the research community have continually increased. Norsworthy et al. identifies notable commonalties found from A systematic review of flow state studies conducted from 2012 to 2019. Norsworthy et al. took one of the first steps towards determining a potential universalization of terminology for future use in research of flow.'''

Csikszentmihályi writes about the dangers of flow himself:"...enjoyable activities that produce flow have a potentially negative effect: while they are capable of improving the quality of existence by creating order in the mind, they can become addictive, at which point the self becomes captive of a certain kind of order, and is then unwilling to cope with the ambiguities of life."Further, he writes:"The flow experience, like everything else, is not 'good' in an absolute sense. It is good only in that it has the potential to make life more rich, intense, and meaningful; it is good because it increases the strengths and complexity of the self. But whether the consequence of any particular instance of flow is good in a larger sense needs to be discussed and evaluated in terms of more inclusive social criteria."Keller and Landhäußer (2012, p. 56) advocate for a flow intensity model because many models of flow have trouble predicting the intensity of flow experiences that can occur under various circumstances where skill and task demands fit together to produce flow.

Cowley et al. found that because self-reported flow happens after-the-fact, it does not really capture the aspect of flow that happens in the moment. Furthermore, that aspect of flow is prone to change, so the self-reported experience of flow cannot be trusted as much.

Cameron et al. found that there is not a lot of information on group flow, and this may be hindering development in managerial and theoretical contributions.

Braxton Soderman's 2021 monograph Against Flow: Video Games and the Flowing Subject points out that flow exists on ideological grounds as an individualist counterpoint to socialism. Furthermore, the application of flow via gamification has brought work and play into ever closer relationship. Play is, therefore, converted into a form of unpaid labor.

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