User:Potatofeets/Cuba–Ethiopia relations/Werickson.31 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Potatofeets


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Potatofeets/Cuba%E2%80%93Ethiopia_relations?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cuba–Ethiopia relations

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Overall, your additions seem to be positive to the article, and follow the general rules of Wikipedia. I especially found your first background paragraph interesting. The two pieces of feedback i'd give are to a: include the wikipedia footnotes linking the references to the corresponding parts of the text and b: clarify which country you are talking about considering its a bilateral relationship.

Additional feedback: I noticed that you used "perspired" in your introduction, when I'm guessing you meant "transpired." I also think your sentence "The Western part of Ethiopia began to threaten Ethiopia making it one of the most crucial proponents for the training of Arms with the fighting of Rebels", though informative, could be better integrated with the surrounding sentences to enhance its clarity. Specifically, I was wondering whether the western part of Ethiopia is the same as Ogaden that is referenced in the sentence before and which rebels you are speaking of. Finally, I was unsure of how the Tigray conflict, which you reference in the introduction is connected to Cuba, and I think that could be a fascinating addition to your article.

Overall great work and good luck with the rest of your project!!