User:Powderskiing1921/Naval campaign of the War of the Pacific/Ariel.Gman Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Powderskiing1921)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Powderskiing1921/Naval_campaign_of_the_War_of_the_Pacific?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Naval campaign of the War of the Pacific
 * Naval campaign of the War of the Pacific

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

- Used the original lead but plans on adding more context or will fix word structure/grammar. Currently it is concise but as stated within his sandbox draft it needs editing.

Content:

- Could add to the sections of Blockade of Arica and Blockade of Callao as these specific sections are stated as needed expansion and focuses on these may be an easier thing to hone in on.

- The content added is a section directly from the article titled, "Navies and ships involved," within his draft he plans on updating the table of ships, as the information that is currently included is inconsistent or incorrect based off of multiple sources.

-Overall the information presented is good and appears to have an understanding of what is wanted to be fixed or added to as this is only the draft.

Tone and Balance:

The tone is completely neutral as the information included is analytical and demonstrates an understanding of naval campaigns. Content added is very base level and cannot be picked apart.

Sources and References:

- The sources included are the same as the original article.

- Professor says to add three outside sources on the topic (her minimum).

Organization:

The organization is basic at the moment but with the addition of new information it can take on a new look.

'''Overall Impressions: '''The overall impression is good and shows a demonstrated idea of furthering the information presented.