User:Prad8960/Galapagos penguin/Vonyei Fita Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Prad8960


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Prad8960/Galapagos_penguin?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Galapagos penguin

Evaluate the drafted changes
Viewing my peer’s article, I think that the lead is strong and helps build off the information provided in the original article, however, its formatting needs a little more work. The introductory sentence, “The Galapagos penguins are officially known as the rarest penguin species in the world” is a great place to start. However, the article is missing a brief description of the article’s topic and major sections. The topic of Galapagos penguin rarity jumps to it IUCN designation of endangerment, to the impacts of predation on the population, and then the impacts of climate change and El Niño with no breaks or separation. The information is in one large body of work under a heading and should be split up into subheadings—Galapagos penguin rarity, endangered status, impacts of climate change on population. By not splitting up the work it risks not being concise and disorganized. The only issue I see in the lead section is its organization, other than that it’s great work and has improved the original article.

The content is relevant, neutral, and informative. The content is relevant to the topic as it dives into reasons for decline of the Galapagos penguin population, with figures to support the reasons for decline. Prad8960 follows the history of the Galapagos penguin population dated from 1982-2020 with a neutral tone and refers to academic journals to support these claims. The content is supported with sources ranging from 1997-2020, and sources should be more up to date, preferably sources provided after 2010. However, Prad8960 makes more reference to sources provided in 2007 & 2020 which I would consider recent.

Regarding tone and balance, the content is neutral and isn’t heavily biased towards any position. Prad8960 just refers to data provided to explain how the Galapagos penguin population has declined since 1982. Prad8960 referred to 3 sources, in which 2 are appropriate. Mills, Kyra L.; Vargas, Hernán (1997-05), and Vargas, F. Hernán; Lacy, Robert C.; Johnson, Paul J.; Steinfurth, Antje; Crawford, Robert J. M.; Dee Boersma, P.; Macdonald, David W. (2007-06-01) are reliable sources as they are peer-reviewed scientific articles. Both articles are more current and include a diverse spectrum of authors. However, The first reference, BirdLife International. 2020, is not a reliable source because the information provided is from a blog. The information presented in the blog could’ve come from reliable sources, however, using the blog as a source is not acceptable according to Wikipedia standards.