User:Presleygilbert/Eurasian tree sparrow/Malgam Peer Review

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General info
Presely Gilbert
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Presleygilbert/Eurasian_tree_sparrow/Malgam_Peer_Review?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_peer_review
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Presleygilbert/Eurasian_tree_sparrow/Malgam_Peer_Review?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_peer_review#:~:text=hide-,Main%20page,-Contents

Evaluate the drafted changes
You did an amazing job presenting your information and it is very well detailed and explained. The only changes I would make to this is to make it a little more simplistic and wiki looking. A lot of the information you gave however was very descriptive but I believe it could be brought down a little. I would have the idea in mind that wiki should be readable to 5th graders. So some words such a thyroid and photoperiod can be a little confusing to younger kids. I would try to make it more understandable to everyone.