User:PricklyFish/Altitudinal migration/Sloth Mode Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

PricklyFish


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:PricklyFish/Altitudinal_migration?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Altitudinal migration

Evaluate the drafted changes
The new lead in your draft flows really well, you did a good job reworking it to present the ideas in a better way. The lead was concise and clear and also well referenced. Your division of the article using different animals for examples was also a good choice, this helps to further develop the article and shows how this topic affects many different animals. Each of the examples help to show how this concept is present in different animals and that it affects many different types. These divisions were a very good idea and it seems like something I should incorporate into my own article. The references you used are from reputable sources and each one of them helps to develop the article in a meaningful way. You've also used an array of references taking them from different sources. Your article has a good unbiased tone and you are presenting the information in a clear and unbiased way. The image is a nice touch because it adds to the readers understanding of the article. A couple of things you could develop more are the causes of this behaviour in the animals, why do they do this? how does the behaviour affect other aspects of their life?. Another good thing to do would be to (as you have mentioned) develop more how things like humans, climate change, or other disasters have influenced this behaviour. Overall you did a very good job drafting this article.