User:Priyanshuuprety/Welfare Queen/Bb1822 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mayaavela


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Priyanshuuprety/Welfare_Queen?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Welfare queen

Evaluate the drafted changes
I thought this was really well written and the sources used were good. The only suggestions I have are some rewording of a few sentences:


 * When you say "this argument had two key arguments", I would suggest using a different word than argument twice so close together
 * "Black children growing up with out a father", without is one word
 * The sentence "politicians to begin to rethink welfare laws were not the issue", this is worded strangely and I'm not sure what you are trying to say
 * "Work first programs impact Black women in very racialized and gendered ways", "very" in this sentence make it sound less neutral
 * "when applying for welfare due to conscious or conscious bias by government employees"

A lot of these are just basic typos that you probably would've caught, but I guess that's the point of peer review!