User:Priyanshuuprety/Welfare Queen/Cworrell09 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Priyanshuuprety


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Priyanshuuprety/Welfare_Queen?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Welfare queen

Evaluate the drafted changes
You were specific in your Sandbox which part of the article you wanted to add to so there was no confusion on which part of the Welfare Queen page you were contributing to. There are no edits made on the Lead yet, but that could just be because you have not gotten to make edits to it yet or your focus is still on the last paragraph of the article, either way, what you wrote so far is great. I am familiar with the term welfare queen but you went into great detail about the gender and racial stereotypes of the term. The facts are facts and that is what you did in your current contribution while still remaining on topic and insightful. I think that the edits you have made thus far have done a good job of staying neutral. It does not have a biased or a persuasive tone and it does a good job of being factual and informational. Your edits seem concise and clear so I don't think readers will have any trouble understanding or comprehending your edits. Based on the edits that you have so far, I think you have done a good job of adding to the article helping it to become more complete. The topic you picked already has a large Wikipedia page and a lot of information already on it so the work you did just makes it more nuanced.

I feel like because there is so much to the Wikipedia page already and if you wanted to continue working on it, maybe just make more edits on the language used in some of the other sections or maybe update any information on it with more current and relevant sources, while of course still remaining unbiased and neutral. I know Maya is also working on this topic as well so working with her to weed out any outdated information and rewording some of the language in this article could be a good idea to see what can be done to make it easier for whoever is reading the page.