User:Priyaraymond/Functional neurologic disorder/Jpow05 Peer Review

General info
(provide username) Priyaraymond
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Priyaraymond/Functional neurologic disorder
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Functional neurologic disorder

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead paragraph of the article is concise. However, I believe it could be cleared up if It discussed more about the upcoming topics that would be in the body rather than in the leading portion of the draft. You could discuss more about FND in a more general basis and then add in the symptoms into a major topic of its own. This way, it will allow you to not only gain another paragraph, split up the information from being one big paragraph, but also have some body and you can add in a sentence or two briefly discussing the major topics of what you have in your drafted article.

If it is possible, I would suggest trying to one or two articles to the draft just to have some more information added that is relevant to the topic of FND. One for the sake of the assignment, and two to add on to the current article as well. You can add a couple of articles that explain the symptoms of FND rather than having it all stated in the draft without it being backed up by something or someone itself. The author did a very good job in editing the article grammatically, it just may need some information change and/or additions made to it. Otherwise, I believe this draft is already heading in the right direction!