User:ProBuss/Gunnar Mine/Peach-boi1 Peer Review

General info
ProBuss
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:ProBuss/Gunnar Mine
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Gunnar Mine

Lead

 * No change has been made to the lead as only one paragraph has been added.

Content

 * Content added is of importance to the article and appears to be up-to-date
 * There is a lot of room for improvement to this article. Adding a line or two to the lead giving a brief introduction to the remediation efforts would help with organization and flow.
 * This topic does not include anything concerning the equity gap.

Tone and Balance

 * Is the content added neutral? Content added appears to be neutral, with
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Sources and References

 * Reference 1 and 3 are dead links (lead to pages that do not exist).
 * Reference 2 and 7 are the same.
 * Reference 8 has nothing to do with what it is citing, and is for a different mine.
 * Recommendation: Find additional sources that are not already in use in the article to back up what has been added.

Organization

 * Added content is very difficult to follow with many grammatical and spelling errors (e.g.. the use of "cite" instead of site). As well as the overuse of words like "tailings".
 * There appears to be very little organization or flow to what was added.
 * Move the "See Also" section to be above the References and not intrusive of what you have added.
 * Make "Environmental Remediation" its own section using the Heading feature

Images and Media

 * No additional media has been added. Including a picture of remediation efforts could be a good idea

Overall Impressions

 * Content added is certainly worth including in the article. It just requires a lot more attention to be ready for publication.
 * Sort out the spelling and grammatical issues.
 * Move the hyperlink for tailings to not be part of the section you've added but to the lead instead
 * Find additional sources
 * Add more to the lead to include what you intend to add to the article so it isn't a surprise when you've scrolled