User:PrometheusDOW/National Equal Rights Party/Cliopentimento Peer Review

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Good job with this draft. You did a lot with the sources you had, and the writing is on the whole strong, though it places needs improvement. I'm making suggestions and edits below in ALL CAPS BOLD and what I put in bold brackets [ ], I'm suggesting you delete.

Please note that your citations should come at the end of sentences, not in the middle of them.

In terms of the history of this party, when did it end? Have you found any sources on roughly how many people were part of the party? Any more information on questions like this would be useful to add if possible. KM

Introduction (we are expanding an existing article)
The National Equal Rights Party (Equal Rights Party) was a minor United States political party whose values strongly supported enfranchisement for women. (THE FIRST SENTENCE OF THE ORIGINAL ARTICLE IS STRONGER THAN THIS. "The National Equal Rights Party was a United States minor party during the late 19th century that supported women's rights." KEEP THE SENTENCE AS IS--YOU DON'T USE "WHOSE" IN REFERENCE TO A PARTY) ADD: THE PARTY WAS NOTABLE FOR NOMINATING TWO FEMALE PRESIDENTIAL CANDIDATES. In a convention held in New York City on May 10, 1872 led by Victoria Woodhull, hundreds of people gathered to adopt the Equal Rights Party platform and nominate Woodhull as their presidential candidate. (THESE DETAILS ABOUT HUNDREDS OF PEOPLE MIGHT MAKE MORE SENSE TO INCLUDE BELOW IN THE SECTION ON WOODHULL) Years later in 1884 and again in 1888, the party nominated AS A PRESIDENTIAL CANDIDATE Belva Lockwood, a well-known attorney. [The women are considered the first female presidential candidates in United States history.]

I WOULD KEEP THIS ORIGINAL WORDING TOO:

They are generally considered to be the first women to run for president in the US. Although women could not vote in federal elections at the time, there were no laws prohibiting women from running for president.

1872 Candidacy of Victoria Claflin Woodhull
Victoria Woodhull is often referred to as one of the first women to run for president. However, it is debated if she actually ran for president. Born in 1838 in Ohio, Woodhull worked as a psychic, a stockbroker, and as a newspaper publisher before announcing that she would run for president. She announced her candidacy in a letter sent to the New York Herald (ITALICIZE NEWSPAPER PUB TITLES) on April 2, 1870. After this announcement, hundreds of people called on her to run as the Equal Rights Party’s candidate. (?DID THE PARTY EXIST AT THIS POINT? IF SO WHO FOUNDED IT?) Woodhull accepted this offer despite not being old enough to be president, as she was 33 years old at the time (EXPLAIN THE AGE SOMEONE HAD TO BE IN ORDER TO RUN). '''WHAT HAPPENED NEXT? EXPLAIN THE MEETING THAT NOMINATED HER AND WHAT HAPPENED AFTER THAT? ['''She was the first woman to be nominated for President of the United States, but not the first candidate to campaign for the role. The first to campaign for the position was Belva Lockwood.]

1884 & 1888 Presidential Candidacy - Belva Lockwood
WHILE WOODHULL WAS THE FIRST WOMAN TO RUN FOR PRESIDENT, BELVA LOCKWOOD WAS THE FIRST WOMAN TO CAMPAIGN TO BE PRESIDENT. Belva Lockwood was the presidential candidate for the NERP in both 1884 and 1888, running under the backdrop of increased awareness surrounding women’s issues and a broader and more public push for the cause of equality. Lockwood was inspired to run in 1884 after reading Marietta Stow’s feminist opinion in a newspaper, which was that women needed to be represented separate from men and by their own candidates. Lockwood shared the belief that male political candidates could not fully represent women no matter how sympathetic they were to the cause OF WOMEN'S RIGHTS.

Lockwood was born in upstate New York on October 24, 1830. She began her career as a teacher in New York. As a teacher, she was paid less than half the salary of her male counterparts. Lockwood later joined a law school in Washington D.C., where she was met with many challenges [along the way.] Not only did she have to “talk her way into admission to the bar,” but she also had to fight to get a law passed which would allow her to practice law in front of the U.S. Supreme Court in 1879. Lockwood advocated for women’s suffrage AS PART OF [alongside] her law career, even writing to the editor of the Woman’s Herald of Industry that women should run for office since there was no explicit legislation preventing them from doing so.

As the presidential candidate for the NERP, Lockwood’s platform consisted of total “equal rights, equal marriage and divorce laws, temperance, and international peace,” and she also wanted to establish more currency in the system and reorganize the banking system.

The NERP’s campaign earned lots of media attention. National news outlets reported the nomination, and a widely circulated journal containing satiric cartoons even featured Lockwood on its cover. Lockwood received letters from across the country, many of which contained requests to speak to a public audience. Her nomination was viewed with much interest, and people were eager to hear her thoughts at civic associations and state fairs.

Despite all the media attention – or perhaps because of it – Lockwood, and by extension the NERP, faced its fair share of challenges. Many letters she received contained “nasty bits of character assassination”. Lockwood was also criticized in the press for her lack of modesty (22). Her rallies, dubbed "Mother Hubbard parades," were met with resistance. Hecklers disrupted the events, and men dressed in attire deemed inappropriate for women, challenging societal norms. Lockwood continued to be associated with an “unpopular cause,” drawing more attention and intrigue than support to her campaign and the NERP as a whole.

== Alfred Love and the Des Moines Convention == Alfred H. Love, the President of the Universal Peace Union was nominated alongside Belva Lockwood in May of 1887 as the Vice Presidential candidate for the NERP. He was nominated in May of 1887. (REPEATS, DELETE) The news of the nomination was picked up by the press and circulated widely, both nationally and abroad.

The NERP held a seminal National Convention in Des Moines on May 16 of the same year, during which delegates cast their vote for their preferred candidates. It [is] WAS during this convention that Belva Lockwood and Alfred H. Love received 310 votes, the most out of any other candidates running. Several historically notable WOMEN [figures] also received votes, including Elizabeth Cady Stanton and Susan B. Anthony.

The convention discussed the NERP’s platform WHICH centered around suffrage, pensions for soldiers and sailors, protective tariff, free sugar and lumber, repealing the whisky and tobacco tax, and speaking against taxing unrestricted emigration. (HAD THIS ALWAYS BEEN ITS PLATFORM? DO YOU HAVE INFO ON WHAT ITS PLATFORM WAS WHEN WOODHULL RAN?) Nettie Sanford Chapin, the chairman of the National CommitteE, was aware that Love was favored as the Vice Presidential nominee. As a result, she sent Love a letter 5 days before the convention took place asking him to message her via telegraph at Des Moines. However, Love did not receive the letter until the 16th and found out about his nomination through multiple press requests. (I'M A LITTLE CONFUSED ABOUT THE SIGNIFICANCE OF THE

Love turned down the nomination because as President of the Universal Peace Union and a firm pacifist, he disagreed with one of the fundamental jobs of the position OF VICE PRESIDENT, which is WAS to manage the army. Yet, he expressed his support for Lockwood and the NERP, wishing them well in their effort to bring the cause of equality to a global stage. Love’s nomination was high profile, with many journalists searching for information to report on. Many newspaper and magazine articles were also published related to the nomination. (THIS IS REPETITIVE)

Multiple politicians were offered the VP nomination throughout the NERP’s campaign process, (SUCH AS WHOM?) but every one turned down the position. However, the failed nominations still impacted the individuals who were offered the nomination, as they began to reevaluate their own beliefs and became more motivated to uphold the values the NERP stands (STOOD) for. This period saw a growth in public sentiment centered around women’s rights and a broader notion of equality.

'''THIS SECTION IS LACKING CITATIONS. THEY NEED TO BE INCLUDED'''

Emma Beckwith's Campaign
In 1889, Emma Beckwith ran for mayor of Brooklyn under the Equal Rights Party. She received 25 votes. ARE YOU PLANNING TO INCLUDE INFORMATION ABOUT HER?