User:Proofreader77/The last outlandishly long talk page response

Outlandishly long response to insertion of small amount of text into a bullet item list

 * COMMENTS:
 * WIKIPEDIA MANNERS: Since the talk page discussion has reached the point of discussing the wording, it is not good form to respond to a proposed phrasing on the talk page by implementing one's preference. Of course, such an edit could have been made without beginning a talk page discussion at all, but once one has, the process should be respected. (Being magnificiently manerific, I have of course changed the change without talk page agreement. SEE: WIKIPEDIA POWER PLAYS 101 :)


 * THE RHETORIC OF THE "AND" INSERTION PHRASING (in the middle of one combined general thought with two halves) The phrasing (before change) is an expression of a connected thought: her general belief that abortion is an "atrocity," BUT held while also believing women should not be punished. Inserting her support for parental consent legislation (specific legislative remedy) between the two clauses (after the "atrocity" clause with an "AND") is rhetorically messy. [Palin says abortion is an atrocity] AND [she supports laws requiring parental consent for underage abortions] BUT [does not support legal penalties for adult women who have them].


 * BIG PICTURE : Ridiculously large numbers of words will frequently be spilled over small matters in talk page discussions on controversial subjects ... Many (sensibly) avoid such things, but if one chooses to wade into the fray ... one should not wade impatiently, but be prepared to go from knee to neck deep and back an infinite number of times. :)


 * MY ACTION (1) Moved support of "parental consent" laws to its own sentence to prevent rhetorical messiness described/alleged above. (2) Moved commas back to position they hold with respect to references in the rest of the bullets. MEANWHILE: (3) Begun examining discussion vs teaching item, comparing its coverage in the subarticle.
 * -- Proofreader77 (talk) 23:08, 6 September 2009 (UTC)