User:ProudScottsTot/Gaza Marine/1a0a2k6 Peer Review

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ProudScottsTot
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:Gaza Marine
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Lead

The lead's introductory sentence is simple, accurate, and to the point, very helpful to readers as it explains what Gaza Marine is (the name does not contain the meaning). It contains information that is relevant to the rest of the article but is not oversaturated with specific details. You could possibly at a sentence at the end of the lead to describe and introduce the two major sections of the article that follow. It is a concise and effective lead.

Content

There is up-to-date content with a sentence containing an event concerning Gaza Marine that happened earlier this year. The sources used are all fairly recent. The sentence at the end about the recent development with plans for natural gas extractions could definitely be expanded upon and even have its own new section if there is enough information about it. All content is relevant and belongs, and I don't think there are any glaring holes aside from what I just mentioned. This article definitely does deal with equity gaps because of the underrepresented religious and ethnic groups of the Middle East that its content is relevant to.

Tone and Balance

The content is neutral, which is especially important here given the political and religious tensions that exist in the region and dispute discussed. I think that the Israeli viewpoint could definitely be represented more, as right now the article mainly discusses the Gaza Marine dispute from the side of the Palestinians living in Gaza. There is no clear persuasion in the article, and the facts are presented to readers with no intent to sway their opinion in one direction or another.

Sources and References

Only three sources are used, and it does not appear that any new source have been added since edits have started. All information is cited, the sources are fairly current, and the links for all three sources work. There may be better sources available but this is a fairly niche topic so it is understandable if not.

Organization

The writing is structurally sound in terms of how each sentence flows into each other and how the sections are arranged. It is concise and clear but the writing is somewhat lacking in terms of style and finesse. There definitely should be more information about the recent decision by the Israeli government to build the infrastructure for an off-shore oil rig.

Images and Media

This article does not contain any images or media. It could be improved by providing some of the location of Gaza Marine (on a map or a picture) as well as a picture of an offshore oil rig or maybe something about oil drilling in the region.

Notability

The article is surely notable as it concerns oil (always important) and explores the geopolitics of the Middle East in the context of a precious natural resource, taking into account territorial disputes and cooperation between hostile countries and groups. It links to many other articles and is supported by the sources.