User:Psychcap/Military psychology/Kayoff Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

psychcap


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Psychcap/Military_psychology?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Military psychology

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Your work on your lead is off to a good start so far! It does a good job of concisely concluding the areas discussed throughout the article. Both the sources on the main page and the ones you found seemed to be relevant and up-to-date. As Liz mentioned, I would look at formatting and adding your citations to fit Wikipedia's standards in order to avoid flagging when getting ready to move your article. The content that you added seems to stay neutral and easy to understand. For furthering your topic, I think it could be interesting to elaborate on other disorders or mental issues that could be considered in this field of psychology outside of PTSD. On the main article page, I noticed a banner showing that the article may not reflect all perspectives of the topic, so that could be something to consider evaluating while expanding on your article. While the main article touches on equity gaps through the feminism section, you could look at both sides of women in the military in the points discussed or other potential minorities in relation to the topic. Overall great job! I look forward to seeming how you expand on the article!