User:PsychgirlTYTY/Anxiety/AvonnaPollard22 Peer Review

General info
PsychgirlTYTY
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:PsychgirlTYTY/Anxiety?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

 * Anxiety

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead section:

The lead section provides a brief overview of anxiety and its classification under the DSM-5, which is a good start. However, it would benefit from a stronger opening that hooks the reader’s attention. Consider adding a compelling statistic or an engaging anecdote to draw readers in and make them want to continue reading.

Content:

The content you’ve provided offers a general understanding of anxiety and its various disorders. When introducing the statement about children showing signs of anxiety through crying, freezing, or struggling in social interaction, ensure that you include proper citation to support the information.

Tone and Balance:

The tone in some parts of the article appears informal or conversational. To maintain a professional tone, it’s important to use precise and concise language through. Additionally, be mindful of presenting a balanced perspective when discussing anxiety and fear. Consider providing examples or explaining how fear differs from anxiety to give readers a comprehensive understanding of the two emotions.

Sources and references:

There were some accessible resources

Organization:

The organization of the article needs improvement. There are instances where ideas are present abruptly or seem disconnected. consider revising the flow of information to creat a logical and coherent structure. I know that this is just the draft, and parts are missing so it is hard to judge based on those factors.

Overall impression:

The article has potential but requires some refinements to become a more compelling and well-structured piece. I recommend reviewing and revising the content to ensure a consistent tone, accurate information with proper citations, and a cohesive organization that engages readers effectively.