User:PsychgirlTYTY/Anxiety/Filmfanatic88 Peer Review

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PsychgirlTYTY
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:PsychgirlTYTY/Anxiety
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Anxiety

Evaluate the drafted changes
This editor proposed the need for a header to an article on anxiety. However, the information they want to include in the header is not appropriate for this article. The article is about anxiety and their possible addition refers to anxiety being a mental illness in the DSM. Anxiety itself is not a mental disorder. Every person has felt anxiety at some point in their life. This is can happen when giving a speech, interviewing for a job, or even felt on a person's wedding day. The correct placement of this information would be in an article on generalized anxiety disorder not this article about anxiety itself. The current header of the actual article is correct. The first three words are: "Anxiety is an emotion." The editor is implying anxiety is a disorder and not an emotion or physiological response. If the editor were to put this information at the beginning of the article, it would most likely get deleted by other Wikipedia editors. But, the editor could add children's signs and symptoms of anxiety in that first part of the article. The article is aimed mostly at adults. I believe the editor could contribute by adding signs of anxiety in children.

There is an anxiety disorder section of this article where the editor's information may be appropriate. But in this case, some of those diagnoses included in the editor's sandbox are already listed in this segment. However, the section does not list the DSM definition and criteria for diagnosis. This is where the editor could add valuable information to the article.

The editor at one point writes as if this is a literature review for a research manuscript by writing "According to the article." On Wikipedia it is best to write as if you are writing your own article using information instead of directly referring to other articles while writing.

The sources did not match the criteria for the assignment. I also noticed the DSM definitions and symptoms came from a substance abuse page. This information should come from a secondary source involving general anxiety disorder. The DSM can be a source, but the requirements were to have at least two secondary peer-reviewed sources for the assignment.

Overall, this work should be expanded and placed within the anxiety disorders section of the article and not at the beginning of the article.