User:PsychologyStudent123/Harriette Pipes McAdoo/Shylak Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cheebk44, PsychologyStudent123


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:PsychologyStudent123/Harriette_Pipes_McAdoo?action=edit


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Harriette Pipes McAdoo

Evaluate the drafted changes
I'm not sure if maybe I'm looking at the wrong version of your edited article in the Sandbox but it doesn't look much different from the published original article so just wanted to let y'all know that in case y'all do have more information on McAdoo.

Lead
I'm assuming y'all are keeping the original Lead for the article because there is nothing in the section as of right now.

Content
I'm also assuming you're keeping the Early Life section the same as the original article, but if not, definitely add in a section about her early life.

I think the Career section has great information about McAdoo but could potentially be split into subgroups. For example, maybe do a little more research on the places she went to school and what she studied to make an Education section. Then on the part about McAdoo working 21 years at Howard University, talk about what she did and how it may have helped further her research and work she's accomplished on Black families. Then create another section specifically about the research her and her husband did on Black families. On the last paragraph on McAdoo's awards, create a subsection on Awards or Honors that will make it stand out; perhaps list them out instead.

The Research section is very concise. Maybe separate the different types of research McAdoo worked on and definitely try to add more examples of her works to flesh out the section.

Tone & Balance
Neutral. I didn't see any issues with the tone however I think y'all should add a bit more information overall.

Sources & References
Good.

Organization
Good organization but a bit short overall. Like I said above, y'all could add some subsections to flesh it out. I noticed that the Death section is not in the Sandbox so I don't know if y'all aren't going to use it or y'all are keeping it the same.

Images & Media
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