User:Psychologylearner1/Ecopsychology/Sarahamc0714 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Psychologylearner1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Psychologylearner1/Ecopsychology
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ecopsychology

Evaluate the drafted changes
I like the "Cultural Concepts and Ecopsychology" section presented. It definitely aligns with the mission to fill any gaps regarding underrepresented populations and helps further explain the history of this psychology subfield. One suggestion I can make is that this new section be placed as a sub-header under the "history" section. Also, your information regarding "Traditional Ecological Knowledge" is very powerful. I would, however, suggest clarifying the language when speaking about this as it is slightly confusing to read. Specifically, consider clarifying what it means regarding the "symbiotic" relationship that indigenous populations believe should be prevalent between humans and nature. In regard to other potential information to add to this article, I would suggest considering adding one discussing the professions (if any) are available within Ecopsychology. Additionally, I would suggest you ensure that major sections covered are briefly discussed in the lead section so any reader knows what to expect. Regarding citations, I think you could consider updating a few from the original article to provide more contemporary and accurate information. The ones you currently have listed in your sandbox draft are incredibly recent, so I think the addition of other recent, reliable sources would greatly benefit your article edits. Lastly, there are a few places that are difficult to understand due to long sentence structure. I would suggest ensuring you proof read for any grammatical errors and conciseness. I find that individuals get much more out of readings that incorporate shorter sentences with easier language. Overall, the section on your sandbox so far is very informative and seems to be incredibly relevant in educating individuals on this subject.

campbell: I also like how you talk about the cultural history of this topic. I think it would be great if you added a little bit more information about how indigenous communities use Ecopsychology in their everyday lives. Like mention the practical use. I read through the original article and I would definitely recommend adding to the lead. That could definitely be phrased better so I think you could help a lot with that!