User:Psychstudent20/Growling/Beccyw Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Psychstudent20


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Psychstudent20/Growling?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Growling

Lead
The lead section hasn't been changed from the main article, which has a good leading sentence already, however there are some improvements I would recommend. There's a sentence in the lead section that has been marked as needing a citation, even though this wasn't your statement I think it would help the article to find a source for this. I would also recommend adding the fact that growling can be aggressive or nonaggressive since those are major sections of the article.

Content
All of the content added to the article is relevant to the topic and is supported by legitimate sources. The part about crabs evolving to mimic growling was a really interesting addition. Growling in dogs seems to be the major topic discussed in the main article as well as in your sandbox, adding more information about other animals or expanding on information on some of the animals mentioned or the new ones you added could be beneficial in balancing out the content more. In specific I think building on the part you added about the environmental aspect of cat's growling would be interesting.

Tone and balance
All of the content added is presented in a neutral tone and the addition of examples of other animals helps to balance out the topics covered. Though the article overall is still very heavily focused on dogs your contributions helped even this out and it would be expected for there to be a lot of information on dogs in the article prior to your additions since they're the most well known for growling.

Sources and references
I checked all the new references added and all the links seem to be working properly and they are all academic articles from journals, which means the information in them is trustworthy and well-researched. One of the references does have an error that says "Check date values in:  (help)" so I would definitely look into fixing that, the help page linked in the error message appears to have suggestions on problems and solutions.

Organization
The added content is very easy to read and all seems to be written in your own words which is great. I didn't find many grammatical errors or spelling errors, but there is quite a few instances where there are periods missing at the ends of paragraphs, as well as uncapitalized letters at the beginning of the last sentence of the first paragraph and the description of the cat growling picture. I found a few sentences in your draft where commas were misplaced or missing:


 * In the first sentence of the growling in canines section there is a comma after "with" when it should be after "behavior"
 * In the last sentence of the functions of aggressive growling section there should be a comma after "aggression" before the word "with"

You should also look at the placement of your citations, to match the rest of the article you should place them after the period of a sentence with a space between it and the start of the next sentence rather than before the period of the sentence you're citing the reference in.

I also think it would be a good idea to make separate headings or sub-headings for the information about growling in different species of animals, similar to how there's a section on canines, just to make it easier to comprehend and find specific information.

Images and media
The original article doesn't have any images so choosing to add them was a very good idea. I liked the addition of having a video of an animal growling since growling is a dynamic behavior that's kind of difficult to capture in a single image. Both pieces of media added are from the Wikimedia Commons and adhere to Wikipedia's copyright guidelines.

Overall impressions
I think the material added definitely makes the article more complete, especially with the addition of more examples of other animals. Since you added some more animal examples you should add them to the lead section's list of animals that growl. The section about growling in overweight dogs is very interesting and would definitely be a relevant topic for anyone who owns dogs looking into their behavior. I think fixing up the minor punctuation issues would be very beneficial in the overall presentation of your additions, the information is all already relevant and interesting.