User:Ptama003/Simian shelf/Lenisa Castaneda Peer Review

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General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (Ptama003)
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Ptama003/sandbox

Lead
There isn't a clear lead, but I can see you elaborated on the significance of the the simian shelf in other animals. The first section that you have, parts of it can be used as a lead because its important to mentioned why this topic is relevant especially in animals.

Content
Great job at keeping the content relevant. Although the article already lacked a lot of importance of having a simian shelf, I like how you mentioned why it;s important in chimps. All the information you added is up-to-date as well which is good. Great way of including new content, but when speaking about the study made on mandibular symphysis, try to talk more about the findings as opposed to making it sound like the article is about the study. You can also name the subsection after the study.

Tone and Balance
The tone sounds very neutral. There is not direction claims by try editing parts that say "it is hypothesized", avoid making it sound like argumentative paper. Use the citations as information that is a fact but what established by others, as opposed to use it as an opinionated statement.

Sources and References
The sources you have given are great. They are up-to-date and they are relevant. My only concern would be since we must focus on the anthropology aspects of the articles, I think i saw two sources that weren't in connection to that. Maybe finding sources that correlate with anthropology and speech. The links are valid, possibly trying to add the date to them would help the citation.

Organization
There are a few errors in the text so try reading it out loud and you will make the corrections you need. The organization is great, just try changing the sub section to the name of the study to help the reader understand that you are speaking about a study that is relevant to this article, instead of naming it after what they researched. Overall the text you added is clear and concise.

Overall impressions
Once again you did a great job at adding new information especially since this article was practically empty. You did a great job at adding not only new but relevant information and why it;s important from an anthropology standpoint. Just organize it to not sound like an argumentative paper and more like you are stating information that is relevant to the topic.