User:Pudding34/Leap (film)/Jiawenfang Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Pudding34


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Pudding34/Leap (film)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi! Here's my peer review for you,

Lead


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?

I didn’t see a part that explicitly belongs to the lead, and I think the article body summarizes the content of the movie but it can't represent the lead fully. May it’s better to add a paragraph including basic information about the film.

Content


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?

Everything is relevant, but it seems difficult to know which part is “changed from original article “ and which part is “added”.


 * Is the content added up-to-date?

The latest relevant date is 2008, which I think is already relatively close. However, it would be better to add information related to this movie at the 2022 Beijing Winter Olympics.(if could find some articles or reports about it)


 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

There is no content that does not belong to the topic, and I think it may be possible to add some content here. Has the film been released in many different regions? If so, what is the release area and time. I see that you listed the information of the music producers, and it would be more comprehensive to list the music that appear in the film. Are there some tidbits worth documenting during the filming process?

Tone and Balance


 * Is the content added neutral?

Most of the content is neutral. In the content of film reviews, if there are more angles of film reviews, it will make the article more neutral. You can add some comments on different angles and perspectives of the film.

Sources and References


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?

The references are indeed verifiable, but the format needs to be improved.

Organization


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?

The layout order of the article is a little confusing, each part alone is relatively clear. Because there are many names, maybe it would be better if you use a table or different font.

Overall impressions


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?

The added content does enrich the original article, especially the “film content” part. But I would like to see more content that can be added to the article. For example, what is the meaning of this film, what is the director's motivation to shoot this film, and so on.

- Cecilia