User:PumpkinBread11/Concrete mixer/Keagan Beckner Peer Review

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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:PumpkinBread11/Concrete mixer/Bibliography
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Concrete mixer

Evaluate the drafted changes
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So, I believe you have started a sort of outline on your bibliography page which is good! I Like the idea of adding more of a history background to cement trucks because there is not much history there. Another change you could do is break down the paragraph in the history section because I did not fully understand the paragraph.

For content, I think this is a good start to your contribution to the page. The content you are adding will be very beneficial and more pictures is always great. I will suggest that do not go overboard with the pictures because there are quite a few of them already on the page. One suggestion is possibly to find a source that tells you how the mixer was thought about or made? That would be very fascinating and good to put out there.

For tone, you are doing great and are very neutral which is not hard when talking about cement mixers. The information being presented is only about the cement mixers and is not off topic.

Overall, you have good and credible sources and you have plenty to work with. The articles you have to work with could really strengthen your addition to the concrete mixer page.I would suggest making the paragraph easier to understand and to break it down and to only add like two pictures.