User:Pumwi23/Muscle contraction/Smbiophysics Peer Review

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Pumwi23
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 * Muscle contraction

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Notes about your draft/edits:

-I would recommend breaking the Excitation-Contraction Coupling paragraph into two or three, to increase readability.

-"cytoplasmic proteins such as parvalbumin". Will you go on to talk about other of these cytoplasmic proteins involved in relaxation? If not, maybe put "the most of important of which is parvalbumin".

-" binds to to Ca2+ " Remove second "to"

-"the next AP arrives" don't abbreviate action potential

-I know they say sodium-calcium exchanger (NCX). Potentially that acronym is unfamiliar to some readers, so maybe just use sodium-calcium exchanger instead of NCX.

-Nice choice writing about excitation-contraction as that is one of the main ideas of this section and should have a more detailed explanation.

General Notes about article:

-Potentially consider getting another picture for the muscle diagram. Not a huge issue, but the shirtless guy might be somewhat unprofessional for an educational diagram.

-Overall the article reads well, but it goes too into depth on some topics. Some of the sections are large blocks of texts that could be organized into smaller sections, with the main ideas in those sections as the starting points of each paragraph.

-Representation of information along with tone is proper, however invertebrate muscle contraction could use more detail.

-Many sentences are wordy, and overall make this article much longer than it needs to be. Some specific details could be trimmed out of the body paragraphs to improve this article's readability. For example, the eccentric contraction section seems too long and overrepresented.

-Could organize Cardiac Muscle Excitation-Contraction Coupling section into more subsections.

-All references appear to work and be from reputable sources.

Specific notes about article

Intro:

-"thick filaments dominantly consist" an example of being too wordy. Many places throughout this article could have the ideas written more concisely.

-Some ideas in the intro could be moved to a subsection, such as the descriptions of smooth vs skeletal contraction

Body:

-"Muscle contractions can be described based on two variables: force and length." This sentence is just a repeat of a prior sentence in the into

-Isotonic contractions, etc. shouldn't be described in the intro prior to their subsections