User:Purplesquire/Herpesviral meningitis/MyDogsBestie Peer Review

General info
Purplesquire
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Purplesquire/Herpesviral meningitis
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Herpesviral meningitis

Evaluate the drafted changes

 *  Lead 
 * Your lead section is definitely improved compared to the original article.
 * It's clear and concise without jumping around from topic to topic.
 * There is a little bit of information in the lead (at the end) that isn't mentioned in the article.
 * The lead section doesn't exactly tell where the article is going to go but that's really hard to do with a medical article like this.
 * What could be done is just a small mention of what's in your sections in the lead, then expand on them in the actual sections.
 *  Content 
 * I think your content is good so far. It's up to date and all of it is relevant to your topic.
 *  Tone and Balance 
 * In my opinion there's not much you can really do with tone and balance is medical articles, because mainly everything is a neutral tone already so you're good on that as well.
 * Everything's very neutral and there's no sides taken.
 *  Sources and References 
 * Your sources are mainly up to date (there are a couple nearing or at 10 years old but I understand that, sometimes you need to use older articles).
 * For your second source ( "Herpes Simplex Type-2 Meningitis: Presentation and Lack of Standardized Therapy" ) you need to add in a date, it did that to some of my articles too you can just edit it and add it in.
 * The sources seem like they're good journal articles, they accurately reflect the content of the articles your citing, and they seem thorough.
 * Article links do work.
 *  Organization 
 * I think the article would make a little more sense if you moved the recurrent HSV meningitis after treatment just because you list the symptoms early on in the lead section then go on to describe the rest of the section.
 * The first sentence after the lead reads as a run on sentence, the first sentence can end at the comma with the rest of the sentence acting as its own.
 * I think it's broken down well though.
 *  Images and Media 
 * You don't have any and that's fine neither do I.
 *  Overall Impressions 
 * Yes the article is more complete now, its more fleshed out and has new information in it that makes the quality of the article goes up.
 * The content would be improved if you went into the statistics a little more in its own section and then kind of expand on your treatment section.