User:Pvrla/User:Mariiobs14/Simonet Biokou/Pvrla Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * (Mariiobs14)
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Mariiobs14/Simonet Biokou
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Simonet Biokou
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Simonet Biokou

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
Hello! this is my peer review for you:)


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? Yes the lead has been updated with more information on the Artist's background, facts, & origin.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? The introductory sentence provides a clear understanding of who the article is about.The writer does a great job giving a quick recap of the Artist's life and background. I would just make a quick correction on the second sentence. I would structure it, " He comes from a family of blacksmiths and is cousin to fellow scrap metal artists, Calixte and Theodore Dakpogan." Because this is the first mention of metal art, I think it would be adequate to mention that the artist works with metal within the first sentence. "Simonet Biokou (born in July 7, 1965) is a Beninois Voodoo artist who is known for working with scrap metals."
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? Because of the estranged last sentence to the lead, I can assume that the writer is still planning on making some additions. Overall, there are some brief mentions on some major sections to read throughout the article. For example, Simonet Bikou and his fellow cousins, his work with scrap metals, and his exhibitions.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? Some information presented that's not yet present in the article would be the brief mention of Simone Biokou's film Divine Carcasse
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? The lead shows a great improvement from the current version of the published article. There's a lot more information without being too detailed. Some hyperlinks to some unknown/important terms would be helpful so that readers could be able to further research and understand the topic.

Ex. "Porto Novo, Benin" "voodou" "blacksmiths" "Contemporary art"


 * Although there is a reference list, there are no citations on some of the featured information about his background.

Ex. "He comes from a family of blacksmiths.." and the information on the second paragraph.


 * The Last sentence seems a bit estrange from the overall lead of the article

Perhaps a better placement of the fact can be found within the introduction. Some more information following the statement may also work to wrap up the lead portion of the article.

Content

 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? According to the content provided there is relevant information to the topic of the article. Artworks, Exhibitions, and Collections are a great way to follow the artist's work. I think a little more information on Biokou's artistic background could be a good invitation to then read about his Art Career and accomplishments.

- For example, some information about his educational background, and now his culture has influenced his work.


 * Is the content added up-to-date? Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? According to the reference list the writer provided, I can see that the information is from either 2001-9. I'm looking forward to seeing how the writer organizes this information within the body of the article. As for the information already provided, some more photos, citations, links, and brief descriptions of the pieces would provide more insight on Biokou's work. Some dates on the artworks and exhibitions list would also help readers follow along in chronological order.


 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? The article does speak on a culture that is rich in Voodoo religious history, and culture. I'd like to read more about the rich history of the artist's culture and how it influences his work.

Tone and Balance

 * Is the content added neutral? The content added so far remains neutral and not opinion based whatsoever. The statement on Simonet Biokou's cousins could use the help of some references so that it doesn't come off as a false statement.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No particular claims seem biased. The tone remains informative, and factual.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? Some view points I think that are under represented would be the on the Artists overall work. Some more pictures, information, and background on his education and artistic upbringing would help readers understand his work a lot more.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? There seems to be no sort of pursuasion within the content on the article as of now. They remain factual, a good example of the writer adding descriptions without giving opinion would within the first paragraph, "His creative and symbolic pieces that highlight his cultural heritage have allowed him to become the only African sculptor exhibited at the Contemporary art Museum of Liège."

Sources and References

 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Although there is a references list in the bottom of the article, the overall information in the body of the article lacks reliable cited sources to back up the information.
 * Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.) After clicking and looking through the references list i was able to confirm that the information in the body could be found within the reliable sources listed below. For example, the list of exhibitions and recognitions could be found in the first link provided in the list. Some sources I realized are in either french or Spanish, but they cover the basic information on Simonet's upbringing.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current? Sources are relatively current. Date back to 2000's-2010's.
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible? Yes, majority of sources are written by punlished authors whos works are able to access in the JSTOR library.
 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.) I did realize that some of the articles are only in french. A good source thats in english i found in JSTOR library would be https://www-jstor-org.libproxy.lib.csusb.edu/stable/3337805?origin=crossref

What helps me find reliable and accessible sources is using the filtering tool in these online research libraries. Some key terms with the english language filter as well as a 90-2020's filter would help.


 * Check a few links. Do they work? All links were able to access except those of the some books. For example, Benín. Spain, Alhenamedia, 2020. Culture et talents du Bénin: itinéraires et rencontres. France, Somogy, 2009.

Organization

 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Easy to read as of now, The organizition of the article seems to be well planned out. I would like to see some more information about the artist before going into the list of his work and exhibitions.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? The overall content seems to have a great flow. The only sentence I got see that I would correct would be the one i mentioned in the Lead. >> I would just make a quick correction on the second sentence. I would structure it, " He comes from a family of blacksmiths and is cousin to fellow scrap metal artists, Calixte and Theodore Dakpogan."


 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? There seems to be a great plan to section and break down the content to be added within the article. Again, I would just like to see some more information about the artist, his culture, and his artistic upbringing before the list of his work.

Images and Media
Although there is no media within the body of the article, I believe readers will enjoy some imagery of the artists work.

If there is no possibility of displaying images, some hyperlinks to his work would provide access to readers.

Overall Impressions

 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? The content added significantly improved the overall quality of the article. Theres lot's of great information added and to be added about this artist, his work, and his culture. Although I did mention wanting to see more about his culture, I think it's important to remind the writer to not stray away from the main topic of the article, and keep it related to Simonet Biokou.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? The strengths I was quick to notice would be the information added to the lead of the article, and the sectioning of the rest of the article's body. I look forward to seeing finish product of the article.
 * How can the content added be improved? The content can be improved by citing the information with reliable sources. Some more sources can be added to the list to gather more reliable information about Biokou.

-Perla Delgado