User:Pyruvate kinase/AIDS-defining clinical condition/Voverbo Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Pyruvate kinase/AIDS-defining clinical condition


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Pyruvate kinase/AIDS-defining clinical condition


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * AIDS-defining clinical condition

Evaluate the drafted changes
Based on the information you have, this could be a good introduction to the page. It states clearly what it is and someone just wanting a basic understanding of AIDS can get that from this intro. Now, for the changes or additions. Some ways to go forward could be to talk about all the stages in more detail. So, have a section for each. You could also talk about where the disease came from, if it's curable, and then why not? Depending on the information available. I would not go into death tolls and the like because it is "defining clinical condition" so it sounds like it is looking for more of what the disease is, why, and how, and not the other extra things.