User:Q945E965/Coronado Quivira Museum/Alejandro1123 Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
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Positives:


 * 1) The introduction paragraph about your topic was very precise and clear.
 * 2) The structure and format of your article were clear and easy to follow.
 * 3) Your article definitely looked like it was neutral content without any biases in it.

3 Areas for Improvement:


 * 1) Find more sources to gain more information about your topics to expand.
 * 2) Add citations or references in your paragraphs.
 * 3) The paragraph about Rice County and Santa Fe Trails exhibit doesn't seem as strong as your other paragraphs. The other paragraphs talk about Coronado and the Quiviran while this one is just sort of thrown out there. Try and have this paragraph sort of relate as the topic.

3 Suggestions for how to improve:


 * 1) In your Quiviran Cultural Exhibit paragraph, you say "It describes in detail the daily life of the agricultural indigenous people which lived in the region spanning the land from Kansas, Missouri, to Oklahoma." If you could add more information about this, it would make it look less like a random out-of-the-blue sentence.
 * 2) Provide more information to your exhibits because the content seems a little too short and general.
 * 3) Possibly add some background information about the reason why Coronado set out to explore the New World and how he eventually arrived at Kansas.